Senselessness in Suburbia: a flash fiction

(Note: This is a quick short story in response to Chuck Wendig’s flash fiction challenge on 5/12/14. Please let me know what you think!)

 Suburban_neighborhood,_Van_Nuys,_CA

 

Senselessness in Suburbia

Ellen opened her eyes and blinked until the chair rungs came into focus. Her head ached and she felt nauseous. She lifted her right hand to the painful spot on the top of her head and groaned softly. . . .

Sorry, folks. I’ve taken this one down to publish it.

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2 Comments

  1. May 16, 2014 at 1:08 pm

    I’ve seen a lot of pieces that incorporate the sentences by using them as nonsense. Sometimes it works, sometimes it feels a little cheap. Your version worked very well and fit logically into the story.

    It would be terrifying to be able to think logically but to only have nonsense come out. Well done.

    • melorajohnson said,

      May 16, 2014 at 3:05 pm

      Thanks. I knew someone who had a type of aphasia and it popped into my head. I’ve thought many times about how something like this would be terrifying in it’s own right but to have someone depending on you communicating was an interesting twist to my thinking. Glad you liked it!


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